A Distraction from Politics

[in_the_blue]

miriammoules challenged me to do another writing challenge, so here goes.

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Rules:

Fandom: any fandom, original or not. If you're feeling nostalgic and confessional, Real Person Stuff^(TM) allowed too.

Word count: oh, let's don't limit ourselves. Go for it. Any length.

Main theme: Life is measured in song.

Ratings: No restrictions.

Duration: Challenge opens now (October 25) and closes at the end of day Friday, November 7.

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Part Two: Altennimer

[siriusstar.livejournal.com]

Altennimer’s song faltered when he felt the sweet, cool raindrops fall upon his face. It had not rained naturally upon Astraea in many years, as her atmosphere grew hotter and drier with the immanent death of her star. He knew too well that Astraea had no rain left to give.

He watched with astonishment as two tiny green shoots sprang forth from the droplets in the parched dust at his feet. They grew quickly, their leaves unfolding to reveal deep violet and gold buds. He fell to his knees and gathered the precious seedlings before the heat withered them. It was over as quickly as it began; the bloated red star quickly burned away the frail wisp of cloud which had given him his priceless treasure.

He held the little plants in his shaking hands, watching with wonder as they continued to grow, their roots entwining around his fingers and feeding off the magic that protected him from the heat. He did not recognize their shape but he knew their significance. Astraea had heard his vow and had answered it with a promise of her own.

As evening fell on Astraea’s last day the Lemari stilled their bells and the Mithic ceased their singing. By nightfall not a sound could be heard upon her surface.

Altennimer closed his eyes and listened.

In the perfect silence he heard her begin to sing. Her song was of regret, of love and of the anguish that echoed in the hearts of all her people. It was played by the hot wind through the dry grasses and keened mournfully in the deep hollows of her valleys and canyons.

As he listened Altennimer remembered Astraea’s true voice. A voice as soft as her once-frequent showers and as powerful as her oceans. He knew that Astraea’s song could always be most clearly heard in her waters. He had never been able to dwell far from them for long. It was by her lakes that he first heard her disquiet when her star began to reach the end of its life. It was from her rivers he first listened to her pleas to save her people, when most Mithic still believed in the power of their magic to save her from her star’s fate. He worked ceaselessly to do as she bid, to solve her deepest mysteries and find the pathways that would, before dying Astra reappeared in the sky, see the Mithic and Lemari begin their new lives in the young and wild worlds of their exile and leave Astraea’s spirit free to be reborn.

Altennimer gazed down the dark valley that lay before him. He did not share the hunger of the Lemari to see new lands and impart Astraea’s wisdom to the primitive children of other worlds, but nor would he sever himself from the world the Mithic had chosen for their exile. His desire was to learn and to observe. He could not yet guess what power would lead him back to Astraea, but he knew it would not be found by forever looking behind him and forgetting to listen.

Astraea’s farewell song died in the valley. The last of her power spent in its making. In Altennimer’s hands the seedlings burst into exquisite flowers of deep violet shot with gold. In their petals he heard her voice as it had been long ago. As it would be when he found her again.

Altennimer turned away from the valley and headed quickly down the path where his people waited for him to open the portals. He was now anxious to be away, before the terrible silence settled too deeply upon the people of Astraea. Before the aching beauty of her last song ceased to buffer him from the emptiness and robbed him of his strength. He held the seedlings of her promise close to his heart. Despite his conviction, he knew he would need all the help she could still give him to complete his task.

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[in-the-blue.livejournal.com]

Wow, those are both strong and lyrical and evocative. I take it they're part of a longer work? I had to go back and read the first one after the second to fully grasp what was going on and how they were related. These are really, really nice.

Thank you for sharing!

[siriusstar.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :) They are just two pieces of my forever-growing epic. There are literally thousands of years and dozens of interwoven stories before and particularly after. The tale of Astraea and Altennimer is among the longest and most important story-threads. It has been on my mind a lot lately and the challenge idea helped me pull this part together in a way that is very fitting.

I will take note of the fact that it was not as clear as it should be. That is a big challenge area for me in part because, aside from the fanfic, I have only been writing for myself so far. I’ll work on it for next time to see if I can do better in that area. I appreciate all feedback very much!

Re: Part Two: Altennimer

[erised1810.livejournal.com]

oh my god your writing has grown in leasp and bounds. wow! do you still have my emai laddy? iwantthe whole story for christmas. i can't beleive it's been this logn since I last read some of this stuff (and that must have been back when it was still hp fic?)
yup. another of those cases of 'what are you doing here'where i'm glad you left jkr's playground. but i'mals oglad i'm not an agent. because i think i'd be someone to take on every manuscript that makes me say 'wow!

anyways yeah. i wish i could compose the music for this. aand i invented a new genre category for books. how does etheric fantasy sound?

Re: Part Two: Altennimer

[siriusstar.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :) I have been quietly writing away and hopefully slowly improving my skills. Do you still have the same address? What year's Christmas would you like the whole story by? ;) It is one of the core storylines and spans thousands of years! I'll be working on it, though. We will see if it wants to go backward or forward from here. I'm having fun worldbuilding Astraea and her people's cultures.

If I get very rich I will commission the music of Astraea. I could hear it as I wrote about it. Not note for note, but the power and emotion behind it.

Re: Part Two: Altennimer

[erised1810.livejournal.com]

i don't know. i thougth whatever you have in state of finished-so-far. it' sbeen ages since i read some of your stuff. i don't knwo which address of me you still have. i'm thinkin the boxesofthoughts one still works but i am not even sure if i ever changed my email for livejournal comments. we'll see though. maybe it's best for me mot to loook, or i'd fall in a swamp of stuff and get completely lost, lol.
i hereby offer to write the music. i heard somethign too. remember me and my sprite-character and kenneth? i sorto f threw the stuff out the window. felt abit like i was tryign to steal one of your bunnies insteat of writing my own stuff. oh well...

Re: Part Two: Altennimer

[siriusstar.livejournal.com]

I have the boxesofthoughts address.

I'll be expanding this piece a bit and maybe posting it on my LJ eventually.